Patterns leak chaos
As they should.
A sweaty t-shirt is
More religious
Than a pew.
Haha!
A longing, distance-bit, piled
On the heart,
Disappearing
Between the fingertips of the moon,
Like the paint around the hand on a cave wall.
What feet, what stride
Will fit this excess of light?
I love the first two lines…and the “haha” literally made me laugh out loud. This is so good! Awesome job.
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Thank you! I’m glad the humor came through and brought a laugh!!
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the opening lines are stunning and radical, patterns leaking chaos, inviting whole tangents of conjecture; I still love ‘ a sweaty t-shirt is more religious than a pew’ ! Wow! I love its earthiness and skewed humor 🙂
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Thanks John! I was hoping that line would hit. Glad you liked it.
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This is fabulous, Bob! I love the lines that have already been mentioned and I too had a chuckle at the sweaty t shirt followed by the “Ha ha”. I love all the webs of thought your lines evoke. Just stunning. “the fingertips of the moon”, and those last two lines… totally gasp worthy.
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Thank Worms! I was really hoping the line would hit, and bring laugh. Really glad you liked it.
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Love this! The “Haha!” line also tickled me! Funnier maybe cos it’s after the “sweaty t-shirt” line which in itself it so thought-provoking. And love the way it ends with that question.
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Thank you Sunra!!
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