The weather is unique
To each comet, would you like salad?
The distances between
Stars have deserted addition and fled
Into the open fields.
In the distortions of Mozart,
The poet sneezes.
Is your raincoat famous?
The cratered
Moon is capable of great intelligence.
Which you are aware of.
The poem reinhabits itself
Like spring, the poem casts off
Its own hemisphere
Like an egg hatching,
Fumbles for its voice, cedes
Its boundaries to the roofs of the sun.
Sees to and bundles up its
Colorful strings into verse.
Not for nothing have I
Summed up everything I can
Hinge on the turning of my head
On walks, the leaves chirping,
The birds rustling, native space
Tingling with countless particles.
Ha ha! Yes I will have salad to go with my comet, please, Bob. How did you know about my raincoat? Thank you for telling me about the moon and the sun. Love this whole poem!! ☺️
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Haha. Everyone knows about you raincoat. It’s famous!! 😊Thank you so much!
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The air vibrates, even the leaves chirp! I felt as if you captured the anticipation of spring in your cupped hands, like capturing a firefly, then condensed the anticipation into a poem for us to read. Served with salad 🙂
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Thanks Dave for the wonderful comment. I love how you said that about the firefly. I’m definitely looking forward to spring. Served with salad! ☺️
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I got to stanza 3, Bob, and the response that popped into my head was “My raincoat is neither Famous nor blue but if Mozart said “bless you” I would bow. lol. I really love, also, the final two stanzas. They are so full of action and beautiful imagery. Bundled up, exactly as the words say. :-). I think Dave has captured what you have done beautifully.
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Haha. Thanks Worms. If Mozart said bless you, I would bow too. Maybe every poet’s raincoat is famous in its own way.
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Oooh I like that. I thought perhaps you were referring to Leonard Cohen’s Famous Blue Raincoat. Is that right? I love the version of that sung by Jennifer Warnes.
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I have to admit, I’m not that familiar with Leonard Cohen. I’ve heard nothing but good things, just haven’t gotten around to checking him out. I’ll listen to that song. Thanks for the recommendation.
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this is great fun, Bob: a surrealist romp 🙂
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Thanks John. If it wasn’t a poem about anticipating spring, I may have held up on some of the images. But my excitement for spring spilled over.
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understandable, Bob; this has been a mild summer for Adelaide so we are almost sorry to see it go — though early autumn has fangs occasionally —
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That’s good to hear. Usually Australia makes headlines over here about how hot it is. I don’t remember seeing any news about that. This is coming from Buffalo, a city that has never had a 100 degree ( fahrenheit) day.
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ahhh so that’s where you are; lucky you; we’ve only had two ‘centuries’ this summer and they were spaced wide apart; fortunately unlike Brisbane where my daughter lives, Adelaide’s heat is ‘dry’, very low humidity —
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Dry heat makes all the difference. Buffalo is not too bad. I like being on the Canadian border. Going to Toronto is fun. And being near New York City is great. But winters can be tough. But this year wasn’t too bad.
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it’s a great location, Bob; we stayed there for a day when we went to see Niagara Falls —
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Niagara Falls is great. I hope you enjoyed it.
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we took heaps of photos, Bob 🙂
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The first stanza is perfection. It works on many levels. 👍🏻
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Thanks so much Michelle! I’m really glad you liked it.
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I can never tell if spring is volatile or welcomed? Maybe both? I’m no historian but it seems like most revolutions, both political and internal are most frequent in spring. I mean winter is no picnic, but after so much time of the same cold, it provides a little security. Anyway, another great poem with tremendous images and if anything, baseball is back.
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I know what you mean by winter being secure. Yesterday I stayed inside all day because it was so cold. Though all last week was mild. And next week looks like April weather. That’s interesting about spring revolutions. I bet you’re right. Who’d want to start a revolution in the winter? I’m glad baseball is back. Thanks!
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I guess it’s climate change with these warm temperatures coming so early to us in the northeast or maybe we’re gonna get bombarded in March? In any case, enjoy this week! Maybe you can ride the bike to work?
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This weather does make me uneasy cause I can’t help but think of climate change. Bike riding starts next week. I’m excited.
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Fantastic! The line, “Is your raincoat famous?” made me smile.
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Haha. I’m glad that line brought a smile. Thanks.
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This piece–and it’s immediate predecessor–are simply top of the mark stuff, the back and forth of poem and nature, the writing and the world it inhabits. I’m more than a little jealous of this.
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Thank you! That is very kind of you stay.
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“tingling with countless particles” Great last line! 😊
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Thank you!
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